I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
You have done so well on this Gemeve, it looks like Unique! Do you know what I really love... you have used similies to describe her after we talked about these being in the BFG! very clever! Such a good language feature to learn and it makes your writing so much more interesting! Maybe next time you could add a background and check some spelling, as I see there are red squiggly lines under some words, a hint that maybe they need to be checked!
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You have done so well on this Gemeve, it looks like Unique! Do you know what I really love... you have used similies to describe her after we talked about these being in the BFG! very clever! Such a good language feature to learn and it makes your writing so much more interesting! Maybe next time you could add a background and check some spelling, as I see there are red squiggly lines under some words, a hint that maybe they need to be checked!
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